Good idea, but I think you need to direct their emotions more. They're not acting at all. That girl in white has got to be mad and scary at the same time (or maybe just mad... she might be crazy!), because now, she's just a thing placed there. That's wrong to me. And that girl in black, she looks like she'd just kiss her. Can this be right? I believe she needs to have that adrenaline rush to save her life. Anyhow, I may be a bit rude, but this needs a makeover so we can believe what we see. Technically, this shot is very well rendered. Nice B&W and compo. On that side, it's very good. I beg you to redo it with better model direction!